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Post by SuibuOgami on Jun 16, 2005 0:37:13 GMT
There’s something about you that makes me afraid That makes me put up a barricade There’s something about you that holds no slack That raises the hairs on my neck’s back There’s something about that look in your eyes That tells me you look upon what you despise And now I step back I’m terrified I see the pain and grief that you keep inside I see the cornered wolf on the edge of the cliff Christian lover defending a heretic I see the Lion defending the last of its Pride While common decency’s cast aside I see the inner child buried in lies Lost among the averted eyes Of peers who fear The pain of your tears While committing emotional genocide But now I say to you That I see in my view That despite all your tricks and Disguises, outfits… I see you
By: Laura Nickerson
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Post by SuibuOgami on Jun 16, 2005 0:38:13 GMT
Okay, this is nothing comapred to some of the stuff I've seen in here but its my first attept at poetry that we had to do for Creative Writing and I thought I'd post it up here.
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Post by Wen Mernde on Jun 16, 2005 2:31:26 GMT
well done. *whispers* sometimes I get overwhelmed by the good writing here too...but then I go write and end up posting it anyways.
I liked the imagery and the poem as a whole.
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Post by SuibuOgami on Jun 16, 2005 17:48:08 GMT
*bows at the waist* Thank you Wen, thank you!
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Post by Vacancy on Jun 16, 2005 20:17:06 GMT
Okay, this is nothing comapred to some of the stuff I've seen in here but its my first attept at poetry that we had to do for Creative Writing and I thought I'd post it up here. -grins- That's why you never compare. This is great, especially if it's your first! ^_^
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Post by ShadowRune on Jun 17, 2005 0:06:23 GMT
OMG! tis'! beautiful! 0.0 and we're all amitooor here! XD *glomps* your poem deserves a cookie! *gives cookie* *exalts*
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Post by SuibuOgami on Jun 17, 2005 4:44:15 GMT
*bites cookie of of Fuzzy's hand and takes a few fingers with it* Gooo yay! I feel better at thsi now! Hoohoohoo yay...
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Post by Vacancy on Jun 17, 2005 6:37:22 GMT
It really doesn't matter how smooth it is....if you can convey an emotion, or feeling.
Ah, look at me, being all metaphorical....XP
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Post by SuibuOgami on Jun 17, 2005 14:31:17 GMT
;D;D;D;D;D;D;D;D;D
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Post by Ellie on Jun 19, 2005 21:33:18 GMT
I really really love this one..... reminds me really strongly of two of my friends... And I adore this line: I see the inner child buried in lies Lost among the averted eyes
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Post by SuibuOgami on Jun 21, 2005 23:15:29 GMT
Oh thank you Ellie! *holds up Grammy and catches roses* They love me! They really love me! *tear*
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Post by Ellie on Jun 23, 2005 0:09:49 GMT
*giggles* Of course. *gives you a big hug*
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Post by SuibuOgami on Jun 23, 2005 13:10:26 GMT
*hugs back with vice grip* Hey! I mustes find a way to get on my sites without my mother ever ever ever ever finding out. *sob* 'Cause she's trying to keep me from coming here ever again! *sob sob*
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Post by ShadowRune on Jun 24, 2005 0:10:03 GMT
wai?!?! wai she so ebil!! WAI?!?!? >_< why would she try and ban you from sites like this? we're all kinda... more or less good people ;D some insane, but not badly sooo! XD btw, does the two-window strategy work at all? 0.o
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Post by SuibuOgami on Jun 24, 2005 16:04:48 GMT
Toooo wiiinnndaaooohhh? I have know idea whatchu talkie bout! But she thinks that we keep getting viruses because I go to these sites. Doe anyone else get viruses when they visit these sites?
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